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10th October 2008, 08:27 PM
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I am Writing a movie, Here is the first scouple of scenes, let me know what you think and if you like I will share more.
Fade in: Setting: Stereotypical suburban home – Bedroom Time: Early Morning – summer Attractive Man, Mid 30s attempting to convince wife to have sex. Man: Come on Honey it's been so long, it's a beautiful day, show me how much you love me. Wife: I told you no and I meant it. What is wrong with you, that’s all you think about. I got too much stuff to do today now get off me; I have to get into the shower. Wife gets out of bed revealing ugly full length flannel pajamas. Man: (sitting in bed looking very frustrated) well shits if she is going to be like ill just have sex with the same person I have been having sex with through our marriage. 'Masturbation Scene' After ejaculation Wife comes out of bathroom completely dressed, no make up wearing typical soccer mom outfit: you are disgusting!! Clean yourself up and don’t use the good towels. Ill be back later tonight. Wife storms out of room, Sound of car driving off Close up of Man looking embarrassed – Fade out Fade In: Setting: 1st person P.O.V Driving car Time: Morning Man: (Speaking to himself) 14 year..14 fucking years!! What happened? I used to get laid anytime I wanted. She just let herself go, doesn’t want anything to do with me anymore, I work hard to provide a good home, I do everything she tells me to do without complaint and yet she still doesn’t do anything for me. (Starts to rub crotch) I'm still horny, fuck ill take anything right now! Sees billboard for adult video store Man (speaking to himself):hmm ive heard of those places….wonder what there like. Drives past sees vehicles parking lot. Man (speaking to himself): well if anything I can watch a good porn in private and relieve some pressure. Drives into parking lot – Fade out. Fade in: Setting: walking through adult video store door (3rd person P.O.V) Clerk behind desk: Can I help you? Man: Umm sorry first time here don’t really know what to expect. Cerk (Looking the man up and down with a sly smile): well what are you into? Man: umm I don’t really know, what is there? Clerk (laughing): Well we have some different options for you (walks around desk) here we have some video that are available for rent (close up on video boxes) Mans eyes start getting wider Continuing walking around store Clerk: over here is the arcade where you can watch any of the movies we have playing and (clerk smiles) enjoy yourself. Mans eyes get wider Continue looking around Clerk (With a Knowing Smile): And here is the theater. Man: Theater? Clerk yes, you can go in and watch our movies like a regular movie theater. Man: Wow I didn’t realize just how much there were here. Clerk: so…….anything I can do for you Man: I think I will check out the arcade. Clerk (walking back behind the counter still grinning): ok well you need to buy some tokens Man hands clerk some cash Fade out Fade in: Setting: Adult video arcade, various people standing around, the sounds of videos coming from behind closed doors. Looking around and sees a man giving another a blow job inside a room. Man looks stunned and continues walking forward averting his gaze. Man walks into a room in the back corner, locks door behind him, sticks tokens into video machine, bright light as video turns on. First movie is a gay 3 way, man pauses before switching channels. Goes through different channels finding mostly gay videos. Man shrugs: oh well, never had a problem with it. Looking down at buldge in jeans. Man: well I need to relive some pressure Pulls pants down to ankles and sits on chair, notices a hole in side of wall but shrugs it off. Starts Masturbating See fingers come through Hole in wall. Man stares at fingers looking confused then down at hard cock, Look of surprise comes over mans face. Stands up and nervously slids Cock into hole. Camera in other booth: Cock come through Hole, Attractive Blue color man on knees begins sucking mans cock. Blue Collar man stops sucking and whispers through hole to unlock his door. Man with look of pure passion on face unlocks door. Blue collar man comes in drops to his knees 'Blow Job Scene' Fade out:       |
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18th May 2009, 11:52 PM
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Not to burst your bubble, but this doesn't sound like a movie; it sounds like a documentary of most of the lives of most of the married guys who come into ABS. If wifey took care of business at home, he won't have enough cum in those balls to need to get off. Of course, even after screwing the hell out of her, some hubbies still look forward to some hot meat to suck or fuck them.
Your story needs more suspense, and jazz not just jizz. The wife and hubby should start to fool around, and then she gets pissed off when he asks for that dirty stuff; suck my dick, let me fuck your ass, fuck my ass with a dildo. etc. She leaves him high and wet with a raging hard-on. Make it her fault that he needs to go into that ABS to relieve the cum she stirred up and refused. When he gets into the ABS, he needs to spend more time looking at the merchandise. Let him gravitate to the gay section, and begin to wonder what it would feel like to suck dick or get fucked. His mind dreams off into some hot scenes. When he comes back to reality, show his stiff boner tenting out his pants, the boner that bitch didn't take care of. He seeks the booth area because he can't leave like this. Make him squirm under the gaze of the other men licking their chops at his boner. When he gets into the booth, he forgets to lock his door. Let some guy walk in on him jerking off. He stares in shock as the stranger asks if he can help him. The stranger drops to his knees and offers his mouth gaping wide. The hubby looks at it, imagines his wife's gaping pussy instead of the bearded mouth. He shoves it in moaning "Take it bitch." After he humps a load down the stranger's throat, he opens his eyes to the truth. This guy sucks dick better than his wife ever did. He begins to wonder if man pussy is better than bitch pussy. He also wonders why use a cold lifeless dildo to scratch his anal hunger when there is hot, dripping real meat waiting to bust his ass. Continue the man's awaking to the lust for men that he has always ignored. Subsequent scenes can show his continued education as he journeys into cruising the parking lots, looking at those guys standing around as fresh meat not just passer-bys. Show some hot action in the work place bathroom where a simple jerk-off culminates in his taking a load of cum down his throat from a fellow worker. The story can continue until the day his boss calls him in to discuss rumors of what he has been doing in the company's restroom. As the hubby enters the boss's office fearing possible firing, the boss locks the door behind him. Removing his tie, the boss just says "I've heard serious rumors about you and some going ons in the men's room." As he unbuckles his pants, he continues "But I don't believe in rumors, I want to find out how good you are myself." Show the hubby sliding off his chair, on his knees in front of the boss. As a final twist, you can fade back to the wife laying in bed alone. She can press her face into his pillow and cry "Why am I losing you. Didn't I give you everything you wanted?" She pulls a vibrator out of the night stand, and tells it "I still have you."  Does not give you a few ideas? |
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